I Need Help Writing The Introduction To My Essay..

My essay is due on Thursday and I really don't know if the introduction that I have writen is ok. I need help trying to figure out if I have the right thesis and if my thesis goes with my topic.

I think my topic has to do with wether its ok to be fat in today's society.
This is the definition of a thesis and topic:
Thesis: What you say about the topic; its an opinion, thought provoking, and debatable; it cannot be a commonly held belief, question, or fact.
Topic: What the paper is about
This is my introduction: Being overweight today is a major issue in our country. Houston is said to be the Fatest City in the country, unfortunately I belong to this statistic. We tend to blame restuarants, television, magazines, and just about everyone else who have made fun of us or fed us too much. We can not seem to take blame for our actions. In part, I believe, its because many overweight people are teased by their peers and by their family, we end up feeling depressed and tend to calm our pain with food. We can not blame ourselves because society today will not allow us to do so.

I just need help figuring out if I have a topic and a thesis, because its my first year in college, and I am confused. I feel like its better asking you guys because some of you have already gone through college or are going through college. So any feedback is greatly appreciated.

Thanks.

I don't know about all that thesis stuff... but how about using bigger words? It helps make the paper sound more mature. In my old school... something like that wouldn't be accepted.

But I don't know about the expectations over at your school.

What I do is just write the paper. Write what you want it to be about then go back and stick the thesis in. It makes it WAY EASIER.

Ok, your topic is good....

Your thesis (i guess you mean hypothesis) should begin with the world "that"...so here are some suggestions:
~That the USA is becoming notorious as the "Fat County".
~That the media is to blame for obesity in our society.
~That people are fat because they are lazy bastards.

that is the general idea of a hypothesis.

Keep in mind that essays are written in the third person (don't you "me", "I", etc)

Make sure you refer to your thesis frequently throughout your essay. Every paragraph should make one point to prove your thesis...

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